Persuasive Writing - why we should have pets

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing about why we should have pets.

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	It's Good To Have Pets
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	I definitely believe that it is a really great thing to have pets. It is also  good  to have pets because it is like having a child and you can learn how to look after one.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	Have you ever felt what it is like to have a pet? firstly, it is vital to have pets  like a dog or cat because it can save time having to clean up everything. They will clean up any food that is dropped on the floor.  It is also nice to give an animal a home to live in.
	Secondly, it is also good to have pets because you can get food out of them like a chicken can lay eggs or some cows to get milk and with that milk you can make butter and cheese. some dogs can also hunt for food to.
	Furthermore, pets can be very important because they can sense things like cancer. dogs like bloodhounds can also be used for the police and the army. They can also help you if you have a disability.
	In conclusion, pets can be very important to people. they can also be very helpful like guarding you, bringing in the paper or cleaning up your mess. They can be good for disabilities and tracking things.
Concluding statement Summing it up.  A summary of your arguments and your view on the topic.	In conclusion we need to fix our field because we don’t have enough room to play, we need our field for sports training and games, we need the field for events like the gala, and it promotes good health and exercise.    It is vital that we have a good field at school.